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My Pocky Love-Review

Entry updated on Wednesday, May 7, 2008

Title: (3/5)

My Pocky Love does not really attracts me honestly. But I don't know about others.

Appearance: (4/5)

The poster and background is wonderful. I like the colors and also the pocky. I never really like pocky but I like the way it fits the poster. Full marks for it.

Description/Foreword: (12/15)

You could always do a cliffhanger so that the readers feels like wanted to read more. The characters personalities are described very well, but you wrote too long you won't want people to skip right. You also credit those who reviewed and provides posters for you.

Plot: (23/25)

It's cute and great. But must you use a lot of pictures? You can just described them unless you can't or it is to complex, the pics are also in a big size you can always re-size them if you really wanted to use pictures. Their relationships also are not easy to remember.

Characters: (13/15)

You described them at the description/foreword so the readers may already know their full personalities. You should only point out important personalities at the description/foreword.

Writing [Spelling/Grammar/Punctuation]: (18/20)

It's okay for a non-native speaker. You got mixed on present tense and past tense. You should read some online English lessons. Spelling errors are hard to find. Other than that, it's okay.

Flow: (4/5)

I can't do more for this since by the time I review this you had just writer until chapter 5. But you are not in a rush writing this, you tried to make the readers calm reading this.

Overall Enjoyment: (10/10)

I really enjoy it, I don't really think it has connections with Pocky though.

Total: 87/100

Nadia's Note:

Hey there, sorry if it's late. I'm kinda busy with house chores and home works. I subscribed didn't I? And try reading some online English lessons too.

Labels: Pending list and Done

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