Title (3/5) It's not the title name, it's just proper english to capitolize the titles. The title name itself is very good though:D

Does it grab my attenion? Is it appealing? Does it relate to the story?



Description/ Foreward (3/5) Alot of people don't like character introductions, but I do, so I didn't dock off points for that. The description was too short for my taste. I would suggest it to be a tad bit longer, and leave something like maybe a teaser.

Does it make me want to read the story?



Main plot (16/20) I believe there's an american movie coming out with a similar plot, but it has great potential:D Just add your own scenes and put a twist and it should come out great:D

Is it over used? Does it make sence? Nice sequence of events?



Poster (9/10) It's very visually appealing. I love the colors, the only thing was it kind of clashed with the background.

Does it fit the story?



Chapter names (10/10) Your chapter names were very funny and matched perfectly. Not too long either.
Is it just random or does it actually fit?



Would I subscribe and keep reading?(10/10) In fact, I did subscribe. Can't wait til you update:D

Total: (41/50)

My comments: You should definitely continue this fanfic. It has a great amount of potential:)

Labels: Pending list and Done